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Post by Eldorion on Thu Aug 16, 2012 11:35 pm

Kafria wrote:Really enjoyed this Eldo,
the characterisations had me giggling in the first few paragraphs and it pulled me in quickly.
The dialogue flowed well, something I am a little jealous of as I always find this really difficult.

Thanks for sharing Smile

Thanks for reading, and I'm really glad that you enjoyed it! Smile I sometimes worry that I rely too heavily on dialogue since I feel more confident writing that than some other sorts of narrative description. I'm glad that the dialogue flowed well though, I was hoping it would. Having such a colorful cast of characters on the forum to draw inspiration from definitely helps. Very Happy
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Post by Pettytyrant101 on Thu Aug 16, 2012 11:45 pm

Write to your strengths and work on your weaknesses- thats what I say Eldo.
You do good dialogue, so dont be afraid to do it a lot.

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Post by Norc on Fri Aug 17, 2012 1:12 am

've read some, not all, but I'm expecting the TARDIS Very Happy
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Post by Norc on Fri Aug 17, 2012 8:05 pm

halfwise wrote:Norc will be jealous.

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Post by Eldorion on Sat Aug 18, 2012 6:01 am

No TARDISes I'm afraid, but hopefully the time travel is still to your liking. Very Happy
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Post by Orwell on Sat Aug 18, 2012 11:46 pm

Dialogue is everything, as stories have characters, and we learn something of character by hearing them speak for themselves. Very Happy That's my opinion, and I'm right! Nod

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Post by Norc on Sun Aug 19, 2012 5:10 pm

Have read the story. It was truly great! (and don't worry about the dialog, you're doing just fine ^^).
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Post by Eldorion on Sun Aug 19, 2012 5:11 pm

Thanks, Norc! I really appreciate that. Very Happy

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Post by Ally on Sun Aug 19, 2012 7:21 pm

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Post by Eldorion on Sun Aug 19, 2012 7:27 pm

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Post by Amarië on Sun Aug 19, 2012 8:11 pm

Now THAT is dialogue! Nod

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Post by Elthir on Sun Aug 19, 2012 9:42 pm

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Post by Amarië on Mon Aug 20, 2012 8:36 am

Did you just call me Amary, Loremaster? Shocked
Though I guess that is what the Shire Hobbits call me, so I suppose it is a bit of a grey area. Shrugging

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Post by Norc on Mon Aug 20, 2012 9:24 pm

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